《教會奮起》(O Church Arise)

上次做粵詞翻譯已是很久以前的事,近日要為教會堂慶的獻詩曲目做一份中(粵)譯詞,而獻唱的會是一首分部的合唱詩,又有變奏的部份,還在與指揮磋商著如何修繕,或者最終都只會唱英文版本,但做了的工夫也不宜放棄,略加修正,在此貼出一個會眾唱的版本:

《教會奮起》

Written by Keith Getty, Stuart Townend
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/x63cVewXAeg

哦 教會啊 來奮起穿軍裝
要聽主帥基督統領
全靠上帝扶助並賜力量
弱者今能誇口堅壯
迎抗撒旦欺哄訛騙
信德擋箭真理束腰
旗幟是愛無懼做主精兵
拔救黑暗中眾罪民
O church, arise,
And put your armor on;
Hear the call of Christ our captain.
For now the weak can say that they are strong
In the strength that God has given.
With shield of faith and belt of truth,
We’ll stand against the devil’s lies.
An army bold, whose battle cry is love,
Reaching out to those in darkness.

同聽令去憐愛被擄靈魂
義憤抵抗肆虐強權
神語利劍療癒眾心傷缺
義勇忠信奮力爭戰
每遭試煉險惡圍困
確知結局主保萬全
神賜萬國為業屬天應許
在捨身替死基督裡
Our call to war, to love the captive soul,
But to rage against the captor;
And with the sword that makes the wounded whole,
We will fight with faith and valor.
When faced with trials on every side,
We know the outcome is secure.
And Christ will have the prize for which He died:
An inheritance of nations.

來看十架慈憐大愛交加
上帝親愛子遭宰殺
從此踏碎仇敵在足底下
萬國君王復活良辰
輥開巨石衝破墓禁
看基督聖身已離墳
常勝樂韻無間奏響進行
直至普世瞻主復臨
Come, see the cross, where love and mercy meet,
As the Son of God is stricken;
Then see His foes lie crushed beneath His feet,
For the Conqueror has risen!
And as the stone is rolled away,
And Christ emerges from the grave,
This victory march continues till the day
Every eye and heart shall see Him.

求每步聖靈臨在注力量
越困阻靠祂施恩惠
憑信邁進朝那獎賞飛奔
為配稱作忠信僕人
古今先聖簇擁並進
凱歌夾道高唱主恩
容我和應期盼渴想那日
在永光裡偕主同行
So Spirit, come, put strength in ev’ry stride,
Give grace for ev’ry hurdle,
That we may run with faith to win the prize
Of a servant good and faithful
As saints of old still line the way,
Retelling triumphs of His grace,
We hear their calls and hunger for the day
When, with Christ, we stand in glory.

《你會否應召來隨我去》(Will You Come and Follow Me/The Summons)

過去的主日,教會定之為兩年一度的青年主日;兩年前的這個時候正值社運,世代之爭演得熾熱;兩年過去,社會在疫情和國安法夾擊下,已崩壞得難以修復,青年人更加絕望,但我深信上主必審判那些在位濫權的惡人和為之吶喊助拳者,包括那些外表敬虔的假信徒,若不徹悟悔改,地獄必是牠們終極的歸宿!

那個主日的崇拜中,主事者編排了散會前會眾同唱新普天頌讚725首由譚某博士親譯的《跟隨主腳蹤》,唔啱音就預咗嫁喇,再加上辭不達意,亂用倒裝,好端端一首勉人立志與主同行面向社群的詩歌被搞到不倫不類,就算有幾多人稱讚那領唱者領唱得好也補救不了多少。

重申一次:新普天頌讚乃劣質中譯之示範。

由於那領唱者(在我家中)到今天還是久不久就哼著那曲子,我決意重新提勁做這粵譯的功課:

《你會否應召來隨我去》

Words by Graham Maule, John L. Bell
Music Tune: Kelvingrove (Scottish traditional)
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/GiXnbOORTAU

你會否聽我呼叫應召來隨我去
向你未知處奔往那懼前路變數
傳述送遞我愛心
頌讚宣告我名號
來讓我生命生發你內成熟永固
Will you come and follow me
If I but call your name?
Will you go where you don’t know
And never be the same?
Will you let my love be shown,
Will you let my name be known,
Will you let my life be grown
In you and you in me?

你會否聽我呼叫以後忘自捨己
遇上壞心好心也照樣無嫌愛顧
無避畏敵對眼光
煥發馨香消恐慌
來讓我應允禱告藉你成就美意
Will you leave yourself behind
If I but call your name?
Will you care for cruel and kind
And never be the same?
Will you risk the hostile stare
Should your life attract or scare?
Will you let me answer pray’r
In you and you in me?

你會否聽我呼叫救度盲目得光
罪虜喜得你釋放告別牢獄困縛
療復染疫者身心
在暗中擇善而行
認證我居你心你在我其內奧理
Will you let the blinded see
If I but call your name?
Will you set the pris’ners free
And never be the same?
Will you kiss the leper clean,
And do such as this unseen,
And admit to what I mean
In you and you in me?

你會否聽我呼叫再莫埋藏掩飾
內裡畏驚怯羞以愛盡除全掃去
憑藉信念去實踐
讓世間美善重現
活似我親手親眼親口臨在這裡
Will you love the ‘you’ you hide
If I but call your name?
Will you quell the fear inside
And never be the same?
Will you use the faith you’ve found
To reshape the world around,
Through my sight and touch and sound
In you and you in me?

我聽到恩主真切召喚迴盪反響
讓我就此轉身撇下從前隨祢去
求伴我導我一生
步祢足跡展愛心
讓我起居進出進步猶如活見祢
Lord, your summons echoes true
When you but call my name.
Let me turn and follow you
And never be the same.
In your company I’ll go
Where your love and footsteps show.
Thus I’ll move and live and grow
In you and you in me.

《爸爸聽我講一遍》(Daddy Let Me Say)

姊妹息勞前交帶我為今年父親節幼稚級的小朋友之獻詩做粵譯,但她當日給出的一首甚難搞,到她離世時都茫無靈感。

後來,兒童事工的主席告訴我,原來姊妹生前有給過另一首作選擇,請我翻譯,就有了這支:

Written by Unknown
粵譯:海牛

Sung to: “Twinkle, Twinkle, Little Star”

BaBa聽我講一遍
我愛你一生不變
即使再過萬萬年
心中永遠你最掂
BaBa我唱歌祝你
Have a Happy Father’s Day

Daddy daddy let me say
I love you in every way,
I love you for all you do
I love you for being you
Daddy daddy let me say
Have a happy Father’s day!

《牽掛》(Cares Chorus)

cantonhymn.net上找,這首歌已有多個中/粵譯版本,我今譯的這個,也難免跟已有的版本有「撞詞」的情況,但還是想貼出來。

《牽掛》

Written by Kelly Willard
粵譯:海牛

參:http://kellywillard.com/listen_and_buy/s/cares_chorus1

全將我牽掛託付祢
全將我揹的重負擺祢腳下
無論哪日 若遇困惑 全失方寸
讓我將我牽掛託付祢
I cast all my cares upon you
I lay all of my burdens down at your feet
And anytime that I don’t know what to do
I will cast all my cares upon you

全將心裡掛慮託付祢
全將所擔的重負擺祢腳下
無論哪日 若遇困惑 全失方寸
讓我將我牽掛託付祢
讓我將我牽掛託付祢
I cast all of my cares upon you
I lay all of my burdens down at your feet
And anytime that I don’t know what to do
I will cast all my cares upon you
I will cast all my cares upon you

無論哪日 若遇困惑 全失方寸
讓我將所有掛慮託付祢
讓我將我牽掛託付祢
And anytime that I don’t know what to do
I will cast all of my cares upon you
I will cast all my cares upon you

《爾國降臨爾旨得成》(Thy Kingdom Come Thy Will Be Done)

入大學那年,八九六四震撼人心。

大學團契的迎新營以「屹立洪流的一代」為大會主題,用意明顯,當中有一首詩歌成了大家在那個大時代的懇切祈禱。

幾近三十年事過境未遷,中國不但未見民主,專制比前尤甚,而亞洲以至歐美非等各洲,人禍、戰亂、天災無日無之。

我一直都想把這歌譯成中文,但苦無靈感,曾寫過一小截,但又擱下了。前幾天整理網誌的舊文,譯詞草稿又再現眼前,念著當下大氣候,決心要把它完成。

《爾國降臨爾旨得成》

Written by Unknown
粵譯:海牛

望望遠近眾亞洲都市內
盡是百姓滿臉痛哀
遙距爆炸至勾心角力
混著和平渴望喊聲
祈求基督賜新生希~望
萬眾靠祂脫捆綁
默念遠近眾亞洲都市內
父啊!聽孩子求懇
惟願祢國實現降世塵
天下同頌上主聖名
惟願祢意旨萬邦奉行
享太平唱哈利路亞!
In our Asian cities both far and near,
Do we see those faces in pain?
From distant bombings to wars of heart,
Do we hear the crying for peace?
Pray that Christ shall bring forth new life and hope.
In Him shall all men be free!
In our Asian cities both far and near,
O Father, hear now our plea!
May Your Kingdom come upon this world,
Let’s all praise Him in one accord;
May Your Will be done in all nations,
Peace on earth and glory to God!

《我於這兒任主差使》(Here I am, Lord)

很久沒寫blog,也疏於譯詞或寫歌,許多想說的話都在私人臉書帳號那邊說,不想公開講。

一星期多前,弟兄傳來這首歌,問可否搞個好一點的粵譯。要多謝他讓我重拾一點譯詞之趣,縱使貼在這裡這個不會是獻唱的那個。

《我於這兒任主差使》

Written by Dan Schutte
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/l1RlY93rIZY

天與海聽我主宰
我在聽我民痛哀
漆黑重罪困萬靈
我必拯救
要亮照幽暗苦境
似若我點燃晚星
今可差哪位他往
傳遞我光
I, the Lord of sea and sky
I have heard My people cry
All who dwell in dark and sin
My hand will save.
I who made the stars of night
I will make their darkness bright
Who will bear My light to them?
Whom shall I send?

  人於這兒
  任主差使
  我聽到祢深宵呼召聲
  如主領航
  我必跟往
  以祢心愛蒼生掛心裡
  Here I am Lord
  Is it I Lord?
  I have heard You calling in the night
  I will go Lord
  If You lead me
  I will hold Your people in my heart.
  
雨共雪歸我統管
我代擔我民痛苦
雖因愛為眾灑淚
竟遭堅拒
鐵石心給我更新
破舊再造慈愛心
今可差哪位將我
慈話去講
I, the Lord of snow and rain
I have borne my people’s pain
I have wept for love of them
They turn away.
I will break their hearts of stone
Give them hearts for love alone
I will speak my word to them
Whom shall I send?

風與火依我指使
軟弱匱乏來靠倚
擺開了盛宴侍候
我必施救
捨我身體作包餅
養活醫飽凡眾心
今可差那位跟我
全奉此生
I, the Lord of wind and flame
I will tend the poor and lame
I will set a feast for them
My hand will save.
Finest bread I will provide
Till their hearts be satisfied
I will give My life to them
Whom shall I send?

《何其俊美》(How Beautiful)

How beautiful is the song “How Beautiful”? How beautiful is the body of Christ!

基督的身體,不單指那個曾出現在二千年前巴勒斯坦地的實體耶穌,也指祂升天以後在地上尊祂為首的教會,本應俊美如斯。

這首歌,網路上有人以之為婚禮詩選,雖是捉錯了用神,但也無不可。

其實它應在施聖餐時唱。

一直想把它翻譯成粵詞,但屢試不成,便擱下了。

上星期,教會查經講主設立聖餐,於是思潮和靈感又回來了。

又原來,沉澱了這許久,是叫我好去發現過往其實沒認真地注意那些細微的音節。

《何其俊美》

Written by Ann Wilson (or Twila Paris?)
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/y8ZonBMFat8

何其俊美 服苦一對手
為俗世之子 奉上這餅跟酒
何其俊美 滿風沙兩腿
朝十架山去 路遠艱險崎嶇
How beautiful the hands that served
the wine and the bread and the sons of the earth
How beautiful the feet that walked
the long dusty roads and the hills to the cross

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  基督這身體 是那麼的俊美
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

何其俊美 那顆淌血心
全替我擔起 罪責一力承受
何其俊美 那溫婉眼中
常定意寬恕 永不把我蔑視
How beautiful the heart that bled
That took all my sin and bore it instead
How beautiful the tender eyes
That choose to forgive and never despise

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  基督這身體 是那麼的俊美
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

  同效主捨身成仁
  呈活祭天天榮神
  因祂犠牲 而活這生
  甘心傾注重價
  甘心傾出重價
  And as He laid down His life
  We offer this sacrifice
  That we will live just as he died
  Willing to pay the price
  Willing to pay the price

何其俊美 主新娘在等
迎候見新郎 眼中輝映真光
何其俊美 那謙卑好心
純潔的一生 貢獻他者得生
How beautiful the radiant bride
Who waits for her groom with His light in her eyes
How beautiful when humble hearts give
The fruit of pure lives so that others may live

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  何其俊美 是這基督身體
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

何其俊美 那奔波腳踪
傳上主真愛 報美好的福音
何其俊美 服苦一對手
為俗世之子 奉上這餅跟酒
How beautiful the feet that bring
The sound of good news and the love of the King
How beautiful the hands that serve
The wine and the bread and the sons of the earth

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  基督這身體 是那麼的俊美
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

《一位母親的禱求》(A Mother’s Prayer)

再過幾天的星期日便是母親節,公理堂日堂詩班將在崇拜中獻唱”A Mother’s Prayer”,詩班指揮想在頗長的音樂前奏部份加入中譯的讀白,著我搞搞它。

其實已放低了翻譯詩歌的事情許久,明白很難一下子便回復那觸覺,所以起初我只想著把副歌翻出來便算交了功課,但指揮卻很想連第一節的歌詞也一併搞使之完整些。於是把心一橫,將整首翻了,卻大意地把尾二一段的一句英文歌詞當成跟前一段一樣,還好在反覆斟酌可改善之處時發現,及時修改,不至於出糗…

《一位母親的禱求》

Words and Music by Carole Bayer Sager and David Foster
粵譯:海牛

參:http://www.alfred-music.com/player/ChoralShowcase05-064/CHM05018/player.html?osCsid=a9f154c3c03ca7f46c5dc15dbf245078

神好比我雙目
求看顧她的路
求給她有聰慧
幫我學放手
I pray you’ll be my eyes
And watch her where she goes
And help her to be wise
Help me to let go

萬代母親求
孩兒哪不知
我敬求神恩
帶領導引她
踏步向安穩之處
Every mother’s prayer
Every child knows
Lead her to a place
Guide her with your grace
To a place where she’ll be safe

容她找到光亮
神真光放心上
迎漆黑每一夜
提她靠近祢走
I pray she finds your light
And holds it in her heart
As darkness falls each night
Remind her where you are

萬代母親求
孩兒哪不知
盼賜下信心
盼祢導引她
覓著那安穩之處
Every mother’s prayer
Every child knows
Need to find a place
Guide her to a place
Give her faith so she’ll be safe

我敬求神恩
帶領導引她
踏步向安穩之處
Lead her to a place
Guide her with your grace
To a place where she’ll be safe

《恩主輕聲曾對我講》(I Heard the Voice of Jesus Say)

“KINGSFOLD”這英倫老調,海牛甚是喜愛。

在《普天頌讚》裡,《耶穌生平歌》就是配上這調子作旋律。另一首能配這調子的是
I Heard the Voice of Jesus Say,唱起來亦甚感人。

同事鼓勵我以此調做個粵譯,花了一天,做了這個。

《恩主輕聲曾對我講》

Words by Horatius Bonar
Music: “KINGSFOLD” English Traditional
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/5AmFu58Tk2Y

恩主輕聲曾對我講:「到我身邊得安歇
枕首於我懷抱裡躺 放低千憂萬念」
我趨近主前不掩飾 困憂衰竭倦疲
主恩中我尋到歇息 也因主恩歡喜
I heard the voice of Jesus say, “Come unto Me, and rest;
Lay down, thou weary one, lay down Thy head upon My breast.”
I came to Jesus as I was, Weary, and worn, and sad;
I found in Him a resting-place, And He has made me glad.

恩主輕聲曾對我講:「賜你滔滔生命泉
俯身飲飽能以再生 再不口乾欲裂」
我趨近主前暢快飲 賜新生永活泉
口乾得解靈性復甦 我今因祂活著
I heard the voice of Jesus say, “Behold, I freely give
The living water: thirsty one, Stoop down, and drink, and live.”
I came to Jesus, and I drank Of that life-giving stream;
My thirst was quenched, my soul revived, And now I live in Him.

恩主輕聲曾對我講:「我乃漆黑中光照
仰望我便能見曙光 你光陰比日耀」
定睛於主臉我見到 我星星我豔陽
盼終一生能永遠走 永生光輝路上
I heard the voice of Jesus say, “I am this dark world’s Light;
Look unto Me, thy morn shall rise, And all thy day be bright.”
I looked to Jesus, and I found In Him my Star, my Sun;
And in that Light of life I’ll walk Till trav’lling days are done.

《窗邊雨如大水倒下來》(When You See the Falling Rain)

《稚子的禱聲》之後,是否可重拾譯歌的動力呢?我也不知道。

但前幾天在臉書貼了這首英文兒童詩歌的MV後,真是愛它愛到不得了,將它粵譯的決心就更加大,於是沒理會版權之類的多餘問題就開動了!

由於是首兒歌,不想把它譯得文謅謅的,便加入了大量口語化句式,而且是從前未試過的多。

《窗邊雨如大水倒下來》

Words and Music by S. D. @ biblestorysong.com
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/127

窗邊雨如大水倒下來
沒玩處 可感傷悲?
想想看那雨是有它好處
為著灌漑菜與花與樹
When you see the falling rain outside,
Are you sad that you can’t play?
But just think what good all those drops can do
For the plants and trees that drink that way…

副歌:雨呀雲 邊位製造?
   點點雨串 奇恩充滿
   是上主今天體貼我哋
   神奇地降雨落蒞
   Who has made all the rain clouds?
   That send drip-drops abundantly?
   It is God Who gives us rain today,
   And it comes down wonderf’lly!

清溪 河流 及小川 大湖
並瀑布 深海 汪洋
玩水氹 游池塘 讓我飲啖茶
食飯洗手 瞓覺沖淨涼
Streams and rivers and brooks and lakes,
There are oceans and waterfalls and seas.
We can swim, take a bath, jump in puddles too!
Wash our hands and drink a cuppa tea!