《爾國降臨爾旨得成》(Thy Kingdom Come Thy Will Be Done)

入大學那年,八九六四震撼人心。

大學團契的迎新營以「屹立洪流的一代」為大會主題,用意明顯,當中有一首詩歌成了大家在那個大時代的懇切祈禱。

幾近三十年事過境未遷,中國不但未見民主,專制比前尤甚,而亞洲以至歐美非等各洲,人禍、戰亂、天災無日無之。

我一直都想把這歌譯成中文,但苦無靈感,曾寫過一小截,但又擱下了。前幾天整理網誌的舊文,譯詞草稿又再現眼前,念著當下大氣候,決心要把它完成。

《爾國降臨爾旨得成》

Written by Unknown
粵譯:海牛

望望遠近眾亞洲都市內
盡是百姓滿臉痛哀
遙距爆炸至勾心角力
混著和平渴望喊聲
祈求基督賜新生希~望
萬眾靠祂脫捆綁
默念遠近眾亞洲都市內
父啊!聽孩子求懇
惟願祢國實現降世塵
天下同頌上主聖名
惟願祢意旨萬邦奉行
享太平唱哈利路亞!
In our Asian cities both far and near,
Do we see those faces in pain?
From distant bombings to wars of heart,
Do we hear the crying for peace?
Pray that Christ shall bring forth new life and hope.
In Him shall all men be free!
In our Asian cities both far and near,
O Father, hear now our plea!
May Your Kingdom come upon this world,
Let’s all praise Him in one accord;
May Your Will be done in all nations,
Peace on earth and glory to God!

《我於這兒任主差使》(Here I am, Lord)

很久沒寫blog,也疏於譯詞或寫歌,許多想說的話都在私人臉書帳號那邊說,不想公開講。

一星期多前,弟兄傳來這首歌,問可否搞個好一點的粵譯。要多謝他讓我重拾一點譯詞之趣,縱使貼在這裡這個不會是獻唱的那個。

《我於這兒任主差使》

Written by Dan Schutte
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/l1RlY93rIZY

天與海聽我主宰
我在聽我民痛哀
漆黑重罪困萬靈
我必拯救
要亮照幽暗苦境
似若我點燃晚星
今可差哪位他往
傳遞我光
I, the Lord of sea and sky
I have heard My people cry
All who dwell in dark and sin
My hand will save.
I who made the stars of night
I will make their darkness bright
Who will bear My light to them?
Whom shall I send?

  人於這兒
  任主差使
  我聽到祢深宵呼召聲
  如主領航
  我必跟往
  以祢心愛蒼生掛心裡
  Here I am Lord
  Is it I Lord?
  I have heard You calling in the night
  I will go Lord
  If You lead me
  I will hold Your people in my heart.
  
雨共雪歸我統管
我代擔我民痛苦
雖因愛為眾灑淚
竟遭堅拒
鐵石心給我更新
破舊再造慈愛心
今可差哪位將我
慈話去講
I, the Lord of snow and rain
I have borne my people’s pain
I have wept for love of them
They turn away.
I will break their hearts of stone
Give them hearts for love alone
I will speak my word to them
Whom shall I send?

風與火依我指使
軟弱匱乏來靠倚
擺開了盛宴侍候
我必施救
捨我身體作包餅
養活醫飽凡眾心
今可差那位跟我
全奉此生
I, the Lord of wind and flame
I will tend the poor and lame
I will set a feast for them
My hand will save.
Finest bread I will provide
Till their hearts be satisfied
I will give My life to them
Whom shall I send?

《何其俊美》(How Beautiful)

How beautiful is the song “How Beautiful”? How beautiful is the body of Christ!

基督的身體,不單指那個曾出現在二千年前巴勒斯坦地的實體耶穌,也指祂升天以後在地上尊祂為首的教會,本應俊美如斯。

這首歌,網路上有人以之為婚禮詩選,雖是捉錯了用神,但也無不可。

其實它應在施聖餐時唱。

一直想把它翻譯成粵詞,但屢試不成,便擱下了。

上星期,教會查經講主設立聖餐,於是思潮和靈感又回來了。

又原來,沉澱了這許久,是叫我好去發現過往其實沒認真地注意那些細微的音節。

《何其俊美》

Written by Ann Wilson (or Twila Paris?)
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/y8ZonBMFat8

何其俊美 服苦一對手
為俗世之子 奉上這餅跟酒
何其俊美 滿風沙兩腿
朝十架山去 路遠艱險崎嶇
How beautiful the hands that served
the wine and the bread and the sons of the earth
How beautiful the feet that walked
the long dusty roads and the hills to the cross

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  基督這身體 是那麼的俊美
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

何其俊美 那顆淌血心
全替我擔起 罪責一力承受
何其俊美 那溫婉眼中
常定意寬恕 永不把我蔑視
How beautiful the heart that bled
That took all my sin and bore it instead
How beautiful the tender eyes
That choose to forgive and never despise

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  基督這身體 是那麼的俊美
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

  同效主捨身成仁
  呈活祭天天榮神
  因祂犠牲 而活這生
  甘心傾注重價
  甘心傾出重價
  And as He laid down His life
  We offer this sacrifice
  That we will live just as he died
  Willing to pay the price
  Willing to pay the price

何其俊美 主新娘在等
迎候見新郎 眼中輝映真光
何其俊美 那謙卑好心
純潔的一生 貢獻他者得生
How beautiful the radiant bride
Who waits for her groom with His light in her eyes
How beautiful when humble hearts give
The fruit of pure lives so that others may live

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  何其俊美 是這基督身體
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

何其俊美 那奔波腳踪
傳上主真愛 報美好的福音
何其俊美 服苦一對手
為俗世之子 奉上這餅跟酒
How beautiful the feet that bring
The sound of good news and the love of the King
How beautiful the hands that serve
The wine and the bread and the sons of the earth

  何其俊美 何其俊美
  基督這身體 是那麼的俊美
  How beautiful, how beautiful
  How beautiful is the body of Christ

《一位母親的禱求》(A Mother’s Prayer)

再過幾天的星期日便是母親節,公理堂日堂詩班將在崇拜中獻唱”A Mother’s Prayer”,詩班指揮想在頗長的音樂前奏部份加入中譯的讀白,著我搞搞它。

其實已放低了翻譯詩歌的事情許久,明白很難一下子便回復那觸覺,所以起初我只想著把副歌翻出來便算交了功課,但指揮卻很想連第一節的歌詞也一併搞使之完整些。於是把心一橫,將整首翻了,卻大意地把尾二一段的一句英文歌詞當成跟前一段一樣,還好在反覆斟酌可改善之處時發現,及時修改,不至於出糗…

《一位母親的禱求》

Words and Music by Carole Bayer Sager and David Foster
粵譯:海牛

參:http://www.alfred-music.com/player/ChoralShowcase05-064/CHM05018/player.html?osCsid=a9f154c3c03ca7f46c5dc15dbf245078

神好比我雙目
求看顧她的路
求給她有聰慧
幫我學放手
I pray you’ll be my eyes
And watch her where she goes
And help her to be wise
Help me to let go

萬代母親求
孩兒哪不知
我敬求神恩
帶領導引她
踏步向安穩之處
Every mother’s prayer
Every child knows
Lead her to a place
Guide her with your grace
To a place where she’ll be safe

容她找到光亮
神真光放心上
迎漆黑每一夜
提她靠近祢走
I pray she finds your light
And holds it in her heart
As darkness falls each night
Remind her where you are

萬代母親求
孩兒哪不知
盼賜下信心
盼祢導引她
覓著那安穩之處
Every mother’s prayer
Every child knows
Need to find a place
Guide her to a place
Give her faith so she’ll be safe

我敬求神恩
帶領導引她
踏步向安穩之處
Lead her to a place
Guide her with your grace
To a place where she’ll be safe

《恩主輕聲曾對我講》(I Heard the Voice of Jesus Say)

“KINGSFOLD”這英倫老調,海牛甚是喜愛。

在《普天頌讚》裡,《耶穌生平歌》就是配上這調子作旋律。另一首能配這調子的是
I Heard the Voice of Jesus Say,唱起來亦甚感人。

同事鼓勵我以此調做個粵譯,花了一天,做了這個。

《恩主輕聲曾對我講》

Words by Horatius Bonar
Music: “KINGSFOLD” English Traditional
粵譯:海牛

參:https://youtu.be/5AmFu58Tk2Y

恩主輕聲曾對我講:「到我身邊得安歇
枕首於我懷抱裡躺 放低千憂萬念」
我趨近主前不掩飾 困憂衰竭倦疲
主恩中我尋到歇息 也因主恩歡喜
I heard the voice of Jesus say, “Come unto Me, and rest;
Lay down, thou weary one, lay down Thy head upon My breast.”
I came to Jesus as I was, Weary, and worn, and sad;
I found in Him a resting-place, And He has made me glad.

恩主輕聲曾對我講:「賜你滔滔生命泉
俯身飲飽能以再生 再不口乾欲裂」
我趨近主前暢快飲 賜新生永活泉
口乾得解靈性復甦 我今因祂活著
I heard the voice of Jesus say, “Behold, I freely give
The living water: thirsty one, Stoop down, and drink, and live.”
I came to Jesus, and I drank Of that life-giving stream;
My thirst was quenched, my soul revived, And now I live in Him.

恩主輕聲曾對我講:「我乃漆黑中光照
仰望我便能見曙光 你光陰比日耀」
定睛於主臉我見到 我星星我豔陽
盼終一生能永遠走 永生光輝路上
I heard the voice of Jesus say, “I am this dark world’s Light;
Look unto Me, thy morn shall rise, And all thy day be bright.”
I looked to Jesus, and I found In Him my Star, my Sun;
And in that Light of life I’ll walk Till trav’lling days are done.

《窗邊雨如大水倒下來》(When You See the Falling Rain)

《稚子的禱聲》之後,是否可重拾譯歌的動力呢?我也不知道。

但前幾天在臉書貼了這首英文兒童詩歌的MV後,真是愛它愛到不得了,將它粵譯的決心就更加大,於是沒理會版權之類的多餘問題就開動了!

由於是首兒歌,不想把它譯得文謅謅的,便加入了大量口語化句式,而且是從前未試過的多。

《窗邊雨如大水倒下來》

Words and Music by S. D. @ biblestorysong.com
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/127

窗邊雨如大水倒下來
沒玩處 可感傷悲?
想想看那雨是有它好處
為著灌漑菜與花與樹
When you see the falling rain outside,
Are you sad that you can’t play?
But just think what good all those drops can do
For the plants and trees that drink that way…

副歌:雨呀雲 邊位製造?
   點點雨串 奇恩充滿
   是上主今天體貼我哋
   神奇地降雨落蒞
   Who has made all the rain clouds?
   That send drip-drops abundantly?
   It is God Who gives us rain today,
   And it comes down wonderf’lly!

清溪 河流 及小川 大湖
並瀑布 深海 汪洋
玩水氹 游池塘 讓我飲啖茶
食飯洗手 瞓覺沖淨涼
Streams and rivers and brooks and lakes,
There are oceans and waterfalls and seas.
We can swim, take a bath, jump in puddles too!
Wash our hands and drink a cuppa tea!

《稚子的禱聲》(Prayer of the Children)

已超過一年沒有做翻譯詩歌的工夫,最近受弟兄所託,為詩班的獻唱,粵譯了這首,希望藉此勉勵會眾,信仰要有對應的社會行動。

但已有詩班員呻苦說歌詞很難唸,不如唱回英文……

《稚子的禱聲》

Words and Music by Kurt Bestor
Arranged by Mark Hayes
粵詞:海牛

參:http://www.jwpepper.com/sheet-music/media-player.jsp?&type=audio&productID=10515355

你可聽得到 那稚子的禱聲
藏斗室一角 暗裡屈膝哀歎抱孤影
每雙空空的眼 再也無淚水可淌
燈火中仰看 望垂聽
Can you hear the prayer of the children?
On bended knee, in the shadow of an unknown room
Empty eyes with no more tears to cry
Turning heavenward toward the light

求援助我 主啊
施恩好使我再見明天朝陽
若我今晚睡去醒不了
我靈請主接收
Crying Jesus, help me
To see the morning light-of one more day
But if I should die before I wake,
I pray my soul to take

你可感觸到 那稚子的心窩
心似家粉碎 已丟失所有那堪追
兩手伸出去 哪有什麼可握緊
惟想有天好過 道別難過
Can you feel the hearts of the children?
Aching for home, for something of their very own
Reaching hands, with nothing to hold on to,
But hope for a better day a better day

求援助我 主啊
家鄉中可與摰愛再一起過
若我迫於遠走他鄉往
寄望藏身於真心愛窩
Crying Jesus, help me
To feel the love again in my own land
But if unknown roads lead away from home,
Give me loving arms, away from harm

(Woh lah dah dah dohm
lah dah lah dah dohm
woh doh doh dah dah dah doh)

你可聽得到 那稚子的呼聲
哀懇低訴 世間分爭盼快止息
發瘋的槍砲 散播仇怨火種
腥風中的濫殺 累成血債
Can you hear the voice of the children?
Softly pleading for silence in a shattered world?
Angry guns preach a gospel full of hate,
Blood of the innocent on their hands

求援助我 主啊
施恩好使我再享陽光溫暖
信當漆黑消失
主將近賜和平新生
Crying Jesus, help me
To feel the sun again upon my face,
For when darkness clears I know you’re near,
Bringing peace again

(Dali cujete sve djecje molitive?)

聽到嗎 聽那稚子禱告
Can you hear the prayer of the children?

《昨日獨想主愛》(Once I Thought the Love of God)

此曲子旋律大路、輕快、動聽又不老套,今早一聽,便很想譯,花了半天,做了這個。

hymnal.net雖把此曲歸類為兒童詩歌,但我以為它(尤其我譯這粵語版本)更適合在青少年崇拜中選唱,不知道有沒機會在公理堂的青崇中唱它呢?

《昨日獨想主愛》

Written by unknown
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/53

昨日獨想主愛只挑選我們臨在
昨日獨想我至得主愛
現在認知主愛當分享遍達四海
獲主愛眷皆主寶貝兒女
噢!主愛暖過最暖日光~
比嘆息一聲溫婉
無限量深遠勝那最深~的海
廣闊像太空
噢!主愛光輝遠勝每一晚
閃照天邊超光星星
從無現世界的東西可將主的愛更改
Once I thought the love of God was just for you and me.
Once I thought we were the only ones.
Now I know God’s love can find all those from sea to sea;
And when it finds them, they become His sons.
God’s love is warmer than the warmest sunshine,
Softer than a sigh.
God’s love is deeper than the deepest ocean,
Wider than the sky.
God’s love is brighter than the brightest star
That shines every night above;
And there is nothing in this world
That can ever change His love.

《今天高興我哋喺一齊》(We Are So Happy We’re Here Today)

今早當我瀏覽到這首短詩時,便想到必列者士街公理堂為幼兒在主日上午所設的Joyful Time課程,不知有沒有主題曲,但覺那歌詞很合用,便寫了這個:

《今天高興我哋喺一齊》

Words by unknown
Music “Glory to His Name” by John Hart Stockton
粵詞:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/71

今天高興我哋喺一齊
學習聖經 禱告 唱歌仔
分享歡笑一起開心唱
這是Joyful Time
這是Joyful Time~~
這是Joyful Time~~
分享歡笑一起開心唱
這是Joyful Time
We are so happy we’re here today.
This time is special in many ways;
So as we gather we gladly say:
Now it’s children’s time.
Now it’s children’s time,
Now it’s children’s time,
This time is special in many ways,
Now it’s children’s time.

《雀鳥在樹頂哼與唱》(The Birds Upon The Tree Tops)

再來一首。始終仍是以創造為題的譯得較得心應手。

《雀鳥在樹頂哼與唱》

Traditional
粵譯:海牛

參:https://www.hymnal.net/en/hymn/c/3

雀鳥落力在樹頂哼與唱
天軍日夜在詠歎聲鏗鏘
鮮花豔麗地在公園綻開
你跟我更應歡欣讚頌神
The birds upon the tree tops sing their song;
The angels chant their chorus all day long;
The flowers in the garden blend their hue,
So why shouldn’t I, why shouldn’t you praise Him too?